I've Got An Presentation, Can Someone Correct The Text?

[Recovery4Me]

Tip...I gave this to all my students to run their papers through as it is free and gives you an idea at what level your work is zoning within.
http://paperrater.com/free_paper_grader

It is a common practice to use application software to enhance one's skills. If you are not happy with the grade, there are tips to improve it. However, you will need to close it out (after copying the improvements) and then resubmit to see the new grade.:hug:

It only grades the grammar however, so be comfortable within your research and content.

 

[Deleted member 27340]

Thank you, @Recovery4Me !

 

[Deleted member 27340]

It graded me with a C when I chose 10th grade as education level. Given that I'm in 10th grade in a non-English-speaking country, I believe that's good?

 

[Recovery4Me]

:hug:@Trauma depending on what you click it can offer a lot to enhance it further if you desire. Also it will check your references to make sure you didn't fall in the appearance of plagiarism category and have listed them correctly.

Remember as well- presenting your material is also a component of your grade, so shine on gurl'!! Best of wishes. I am proud of you.

 

[catjudo]

I took another go at it. Feel free to ignore me or tell me to stop...

The following are additional facts about Gandhi that fall outside topics previously discussed in the presentation. Despite being a leader and speaker with seemingly no shyness, Gandhi was extremely shy as a child. He'd run home from school to avoid talking to people, and this extreme personality trait didn't truly start to change until he moved to England. At first his vegetarianism and the significant changes brought about by transitioning from his home to London made him even more shy. His friends told him that excluding meat from his diet would have a negative impact on his studies and health. Fortunately for him, he found a vegetarian restaurant that allowed him to dive deeper into the vegetarian “underground” of late 19th century London. As a result, he came across a number of different people with whom he shared common interests. Along with finding this restaurant and meeting many new people, he came across a book that provided reasonable defence for vegetarianism. The combination of these life changes brought shy Gandhi out of his shell, and he started to consider himself almost a missionary of vegetarianism. This change could possibly be linked to his ability later in life to lead the movement of non-violence in South Africa.

 

[Seasounds]

I can help. Since you are working with a short turn-around time, I'll make small editing suggestions.
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Your written text, for your verbal presentation, will provide cues of movement and emphasis that you can make (for yourself and for your audience). My general comments, are to ask you to consider some paragraph breaks:

• Between "moved to England", (break), and "At first"'
• Break, new paragraph, at "Diving deeper".
• Next break, "These life changes"
• Near the end, land your point; perhaps elaborate in a sentence, what exact skills he may have learned, that helped him in his future efforts.

Very good, over all. You write clearly and give good examples.

I believe you will do well.