Mr Tom

[leanne1321]

I decided to put on this rhyming story I'm writing for my 4 year old, inspired by the 2 kittens I've taken in off the streets. I haven't finished yet (I only started today) and I think I'll try and draw some pictures for it too.

Mr Tom was a big, fat, grumpy cat
His nose was white and his eyes were black.
With fleas in his fur and dirt on his feet
You could tell he lived out on the street
Until one day when he met a hungry fox
Who chased him straight into a box.
The fox was too big to get inside.
Mr Tom smiled; what a great place to hide?
The box slammed shut with a snap.
Oh no! He was caught in a trap!
He hissed and wailed and flailed about
But it was no use, he couldn’t get out.
The hungry fox howled and laughed,
“You stupid fat cat, you really are daft.”
“It’s better than been eaten than you.”
Mr Tom laughed back and waved him adieu.
The fox left, bitter and sour
And the minutes ticked by and turned into hours.
A terrible night he spent in there
Until woken by the early suns glare.
Not long after, he heard a sound
And saw two feet appear on the ground.
A man peered into the cage
And Mr Tom hissed in rage.
“What a grumpy cat.
No wonder, you’re filthy and fat.”

That's it so far, and any suggestions would be welcome.

 

[Muzikluvr]

That's terrific, Leanne! Very well done!:applause: I can't wait to read the rest! ... and see drawings!:dance:

 

[stormy]

Wow! Leanne I think that is sooooo awesome!!!! Keep going with that..you left us hanging, I want to hear more!!!!
GREAT JOB!!!!!! yaaaa!

 

[leanne1321]

Thankyou! Thankyou! (taking a bow!)

First childrens story, most of my work is much more grown up, but I'm having fun!

 

[stormy]

You are very talented, I can't wait to hear more!!! :applause:

 

[leanne1321]

Some more I've just done...

Mr Tom was ready and prepared to fight
When the man vanished from sight.
With the man gone, he began to despair
How was he going to get out of there?
And just like that, in the blink of an eye
The cage was being lifted, picked up high.
It shook and swayed
And Mr Tom was afraid.
He wanted to yell and shriek
But his voice was lost and weak.
He was put in the back of a van
With other trapped cats, some black and tan.
“Where do you think we’re going?”
One asked as the van was slowing.
“Maybe to Mars, who cares?
As long as there are no bears.”

 

[stormy]

This is sooooo fun to read...totally loving it!!!!!!!!

 

[leanne1321]

Should have it finished today, but here's some more...

The van door opened, light flooded in
And Mr Tom saw a large, white building.
He struggled to get out, to get free, but unable
And once again, the ground became unstable.
He was carried through the double doors
And gently placed on the floor.
He knew this place was evil
Because it was full of people.
Not all were wicked, some were nice
After all, they didn’t like rats or mice.
He’d once had a family and a home
Complete with garden and a knome.
He’d been loved and they’d fed him
But he couldn’t help feeling grim.
“I’ve got to get out, what can I do?”
“Don’t worry, we’ll look after you.”
A friendly looking woman cooed,
“You must be hungry, here have some food.”
She laid down a dish
That smelled like tuna fish.
“It can’t be all that bad.” He thought
It was better than the birds he caught.
With his tummy full, he was spent,
Curled up nicely, all content.
Then the lady came back, she returned
“Let’s get you looked at” she said concerned.
She inspected his teeth and underneath.
She checked his ears, despite his fears.
She clipped his nails,
He didn’t like that.
She gave him a bath
And he hated that.

 

[leanne1321]

“You’re a bit dumpy and very grumpy
But we have a nice home for you to stay
Where you can chase mice and play.”

Indeed it was true, with children too
He had a family and a home
Complete with garden and a gnome
He was able to play to his heart’s content
Along the walls and under the fence.
And who’d of ever thought
A love like this could be bought?
Mr Tom’s days were filled with laughter
He finally got his ever after.

There... finished! I just moved this into this last section, it fits better there.

He’d once had a family and a home
Complete with garden and a knome.

 

[stormy]

:applause:I soooo love it!!!!! woooohooo!!!!!! :dance: I cant wait til you write another one!!!!!

 

[leanne1321]

Thanks stormy!

It made the kids laugh anyway, which was the main point.

I've got loads of writing but it's all for adults. I might post my prologue of my current work in progress, or at least part of it. It's based as much on fact as I can, but the rest of the story is fictional and a bit gruesome in places.

I'd love to be a published author!

 

[Muzikluvr]

I think you're very talented! :applause:And, I don't doubt that someone would publish your Mr. Tom children's story.:dance: